||[Mar. 28th, 2010|10:54 pm]
Through an unfortunate series of clicks, I found myself at this horrible interactive marketing company website, reading about "copywriting". (I'd link directly to that section, but I can't because of their crappy Flash website.) Here's the first sentence of the "copywriting" section:
Mark Twain once said that the difference between choosing the right word from the perfect word, was the different between thunder and lightning.
Seriously, Three Ring Focus? Seriously? Three copywriting mistakes in the first sentence of the "copywriting" section of your website? A website that you're apparently proud of? I won't continue, because, amazingly, it gets worse from there.
That's all small stuff. The true irony is far greater.
The difference between the almost right word & the right word is really a large matter--it's the difference between the lightning bug and the lightning.
- Letter to George Bainton, 10/15/1888
*Thunder* and lightning?
Edited at 2010-03-29 04:20 am (UTC)
HOLY CRAP. You're right. Now that I think about it, I must have heard the "lightning bug and the lightning" quotation half a dozen times, but I didn't manage to recognize that that was what they were (utterly failing to) reference. Jeez. It's just layers upon layers of SUCK, isn't it?
So by "almost right", he meant "subtly but definitely wrong", versus "probably good enough, but not as snappy as it could be".
That means something pretty different!
How long 'til we send Three Ring Focus a link?
Yup, I noticed that too. Also, it's real taboo to not have a quotation either in quotes or as a block quote if you're all about perfect form.
A big part of copywriting/editing is checking the accuracy of things like this. Even in my college copyediting course, most of my 20-21 year old peers found every factual error in the literary magazine that we were working on and managed to correct it. Sheesh.
Ah, but thanks to the errors, Lindsey has brought something to our attention which would have otherwise evaded it. Marketing success!
You could argue that they're doing an indirect quote instead of a direct quote. I'm not sure that it's the right approach for a quote this short that's easy to look up, but it's at least an approach that's not terribly wrong, unlike everything else about the sentence.
 I've forgotten the actual terms, but here are examples that refer to the same fictional event:
a -- direct) Sally said, "Let's go see if there's a good movie showing."
b -- indirect) Sally said that we should go see a movie.
You're right. You could definitely say it like that. It still stands that they misquoted when it would've taken like three seconds to research it. Silly Marketing companies!