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The glass, all empty, turns out to be full [Jun. 20th, 2008|01:22 am]
Lindsey Kuper
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I ain't no Sarah Burghardt, but here's an attempt:

Another day's insistent rays incite
my grudging eyes to open, blurring red
dawn-glow with blood. I stumble from the bed;
I squint; I groan; I try to stand upright.
What drug, what magic spell makes sun less bright?
This water glass will have to do, instead.
One sip, and stars explode inside my head.
I blink; I stall; I drink it all in spite.
But when I'm done and set it down at last,
I see that it was magic all along:
a thousand rainbows dance across the wall.
The morning sun, refracting through the glass!
Both optimists and pessimists are wrong.
The glass, all empty, turns out to be full.

It could be better, but I like that I was able to write a poem about light without ever actually using the word "light", even though it would've fit.

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[User Picture]From: sarahtomic
2008-06-21 01:43 pm (UTC)
It's beautiful and also easy to follow--what a sweet conclusion!!!
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[User Picture]From: lindseykuper
2008-06-22 02:55 am (UTC)
Thank you! I still can't get over how good that first one of yours is. I love how "Alliteration also aids them all" is alliterative.

Actually, I was doing this in the first place because I realized that this Weakerthans song is a sonnet, and I thought, "I can do that, too." I've been trying to get a song out of this, but it's weird to have to make the music fit the words. Usually, I can tweak both until they're just right. In this case, I had to do enough tweaking just to make the content fit the form. If I can actually get it to fit the music, that would really be something.
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[User Picture]From: deepdistraction
2008-06-21 06:44 pm (UTC)
It's lovely! And in classic Italian sonnet form, too. Though I smiled when I saw that you posted it at 1:22 a.m. Not exactly the crack of dawn
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[User Picture]From: lindseykuper
2008-06-22 02:59 am (UTC)
Heh, yeah. Well, it's been bouncing around in my head, and my notebook, for weeks. Also, it's fictional! I'm not even sure an empty glass can refract like that. (Although maybe if it were a fancy crystal glass...)
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